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Writing task 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
taken from the Bureau of Labor Statistics
The graph illustrates data related to the changes in the prices of several products such as fresh fruits and vegetables, sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks. (1) in the U.S.(2) between 1978 and 2009.
(1) This information needs to be included.
(2) Not Given. You do not need to write this information.
The information taken from the Bureau of Labor Statistics shows a considerable increase in the prices of the three products analysed (1) and therefore, in the consumer-price index, over the period.
(1) Delete this word. The products were not analysed.
In a more detailed analysis (1), the price of fresh fruits (2) and vegetables started at approximately/just over (4) 50% and then increased dramatically by about (4) 300% by the end of the period. It also registered some fluctuations in the rate of the price growth, but the increase of that item remained steady.
(1) Rephrase this. A more detailed analysis shows that
(2) Spelling. Fruits
(3)(4) This information needs to be added because we are not given the exact numbers.
The prices (1) of sugar and sweets also went up but the trend was more gradual. The former rose about 150% and the latter rose by 100%.(2)
(1) price. Singular form needed.
(2) Not clear. The way you have phrased this you are telling me that THE FORMER refers to SUGAR and THE LATTER refers to SWEETS. This is not the case because sugar and sweets is one category.
Due tue(1) the changes in the prices previously mentioned, the consumer-price index increased steadily during the three decades. It started in(2) about (3) 50% and finished in a little more than 200% in 2009.
(1) Spelling. Due to
(2) at
(3) This information needs to be added because we are not given exact figures.
Taking all the figures into account fresh fruits and vegetables were priced higher compared to sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks. Moreover, the customer-price index went up and it reveals a rise in the cost of living from 1978 to 2009.
5.5
TASK ACHIEVEMENT 5 (No mention of carbonated drinks. At least 150 words)
COHERENCE AND COHESION 5.5
LEXICAL RESOURCE 5.5
GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY 6
Writing task 2
Many high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women.
To what extent do you agree?
The fact that there are more men than women who are contracted by companies to fill high level positions reveals that there are (1) too much inequality in the current time(2). I think, women have the same abilities than men to perform any job and therefore they deserve the same treatment.(3)(4)
(1) There is too much inequality (Inequality is an uncountable noun)
(2) Vocabulary. nowadays/in our day and age
(3) Your thesis statement needs to address specifically whether companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of their positions to women.
(4) In addition, you should mention to what extent you agree.
Newdays,(1) there are many powerful women who show they can lead projects in diverse fields such as science and politics. This is clearly illustrated by Angela Merkel who is the current German chancellor and who has led her country for almost one decade. Another example is a young girl from USA(2) who on(3) spite of her age, is considered as(4) the Einstein of our time.
(1) Spelling. Nowadays
(2) Grammar. the USA
(3) Grammar. in spite of
(4) Vocabulary. considered to be/regarded as
Moreover, many studies reveals(1) the women’ qualities to undertake projects. It is widely recognized that in many cases, women are more responsible, disciplined and even smarter than men. A striking example of this is represented by the movie Hidden Figures which tells the story of three women whose scientific work was essential for the development of the U.S. special race.
(1) Grammar. Many studies reveal
Additionally,(1) it cannot be forgotten the important role that women play in the evolution of society.(2) As mothers, they are example(3) for humanity and they are the first master(4) of children. It means that woman have influenced world(4) as much as men have done it.
However, it is true that, men are also essential for society and there are many famous men who through(5) history have brought many positive changes.(6)
(1) Grammar. In addition,
(2) Grammar. Word order. The important role that women play in the evolution of society cannot be forgotten.
(3) Grammar. an example
(4) Vocabulary. master not an appropriate word
(5) Vocabulary. throughout
(6) Vocabulary. Should be part of the previous paragraph
Having said that, companies must offer the same opportunities for both women and men and it includes equal salaries and job conditions in order to reduce gender inequality.
6.5
TASK RESPONSE 6
COHERENCE AND COHESION 6.5
LEXICAL RESOURCE 6.5
GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY 6.5
Writing task 2
As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?
Pollution is a trouble(1) that affects big cities around the world, principally for the dramatic increase of(2) private cars. The situation seems to be worst(3) due tue(4) people’s trend of buy(5) more than one car per family. What can be done to solve this problem?
(1) Vocabulary. Pollution is an issue/environmental problem
(2) Grammar. increase in
(3) Grammar. worse – comparative form needed
(4) Spelling. due to
(5) Grammar/Vocabulary. tendency to buy
To begin with, governments must address public budget(1) to offer multimodal transport. Big cities need the conjunction of more than one mode of transport. A city interconnected by trains, trams and buses, will encourage people to leave their cars in home.(2)
(1) Vocabulary. Need to use appropriate vocabulary. allocate funds for infrastructure and offer…
(2) Grammar. at home
Also(1) is(2) necessary to promove(3) the bicycle use.(4) The most developed cities have designed roads specially(5) for bicycles. It has encouraged people to use them and therefore, pollution levels has(6) dropped increasingly.(7)
(1) Grammar/Vocabulary. Do not use also to begin a sentence. Use In addition/ Moreover/Furthermore
(2) Grammar. Use a subject. it is
As a last measure, governments should ban the purchase of more than one car per family. It can be seen how families buy even more than two cars causing more traffic and pollution.
To summarise, the alternatives previously explained, will bring solutions to this challenge which has become one of the principal environmental problems of the(1) modern world.
(1) Grammar. Article needed. the modern world
5
TASK ACHIEVEMENT 5 (Too short. At least 250 words)
COHERENCE AND COHESION 5 (Main body paragraphs should be more than one sentence)
LEXICAL RESOURCE 5.5
GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY 5 (Too many mistakes).